Honey on their lips,
but beneath—a jaw that snaps.
Strike first. Tame the beast.
About the Creator
Komal
I write poems and stories that hit the feels.
When I’m not lost in my own plots, I’m either daydreaming about the next big idea or just winging life with a grin.
𝕀 𝕙𝕒𝕧𝕖 𝕥𝕙𝕖 ℙ𝕠𝕨𝕖𝕣 𝕥𝕠 𝕞𝕒𝕜𝕖 𝕒𝕟 𝕀𝕄ℙ𝔸ℂ𝕋
The Cave Part 11
Darkness, and the countless points of light, as if the entire void beyond was filled with the fire of a million stars. I felt as if I was staring into the eternity of a night sky beyond those wooden doors, the place beyond the actual reality, while I stood behind a curtain of scenery, the mountain and sky a mere pretense. And in that void beyond of unfathomable space, there hung suspended a mighty shard of crystal floating in place, with hundreds of a far smaller chunks orbiting around it in balanced but intersecting circles, no two in the same path. These caught the light from the center, and sparkled with inner fire each.
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Comments (20)
Yowza! Haiku that bites!! 😍
This would make a great story. Excellent Haiku!
Wow. What a fierce haiku! Well done.
Love how this turns elegance into warning. “Honey on their lips” says it all — beauty masking danger.
And that's a smart one, Komal! And chilling!
Circling back to say congrats on honourable mention in this week's leaderboard, Komal!!
Congratulations!
you truly "hit the feel" with this one! Fantastic!
A Cobra Kaiku? Well-wrought!
Oh! A haiku with a bite. Love it, Komal
Yep! So good, Komal.
Good job!
I love how this haiku blends sweetness with danger in such a powerful way.
So good. Love the partial rhymes — lips/snaps and beneath/beast which adds to the flow while showcasing the effectively jarring ‘strike’. 🤗
Ah yes, gilding.- a golden veneer. lDiscerning it is vital to avoid getting struck first 😳 vivid imagery on this one!
Ooooo! I love the bite to this Komal!! (pun definitely intended)
Good luck on first strike. By the time we know danger.....
Gilding is a perfect choice. Sometimes the sad truth is covered with a thin layer of gold.
Makes me think of people who I’ve known who were kind on the surface but cruel on the inside.
I’m not sure how to interpret this.